May 082011
Six Sentence Sunday is something I have been meaning to take part in for a few weeks and this week I am actually managing to do so!
I hope you enjoy the excerpt below, taken from an as yet untitled work in progress. Comments are welcome.
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“His dark brown hair was pulled back into a pony tail and he was wearing a long, brown trench coat. He had a neatly trimmed goatee covering his upper lip and chin. It was a look that Lena wouldn’t normally have gone for but something about him drew her in and she couldn’t help but stand there, immobilized, staring at him.
He was very tall and he looked down at her with a look in his dark eyes that seemed to say he owned this street with everything—and everyone—on it. She liked that look. Very much.”
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I love trench coats! Great description!
Thanks Rebecca! I wanted to describe his shoes too but I thought that would be a bit much!
He sounds like an intriguing character (was picturing Joseph Fiennes when reading it – yum!). Great six!
He’s certainly not a softy! And yes, in my head I suppose he does look a little like Joseph Fiennes, although I hadn’t thought of him when I was writing the character.
Smooth six, Charlotte. I like it.
Glad you liked the excerpt Kim, thanks!
Nice snippet!
Thank you!
The Long hair goat tee and trench work for me! Nice 6!
Yes, it has quite an effect on me too!
Love the description of the man
Thanks, Lindsay!
Nicely done.
Thanks!
I think he sounds dangerous! I like it! LOL
He is ;)
Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday! Great six!
Thanks! It was fun picking the six sentences.
Fab. A street-owning man. Awesome.
Confidence is sexy!
She’s got great taste… I think I’d like that look, too hehe Nice six :)
Thanks! He’s probably wearing a hat too. It’s the sort of thing he would do.